niallomqfood

@lexis_xx okay. so I just finished reading it ! I honestly think you need to edit it and fix grammar issues. it has great length, it's not too short. and I also think you should add a bit more detail. overall I think you're on the right track and it's got a good story line. but I need more! so update girl ! (: xx

niallomqfood

@lexis_xx okay. so I just finished reading it ! I honestly think you need to edit it and fix grammar issues. it has great length, it's not too short. and I also think you should add a bit more detail. overall I think you're on the right track and it's got a good story line. but I need more! so update girl ! (: xx