hey there Nina!
tysm for d follow!
pls do check out my book VEILed Destiny bound by blood and vote\comment and share it.
it's on my other account SaraRima
I read ur story and I really liked it!
I totally dig the crush-on-bestfriend theme and plus u hav my fav ppl as ur characters
I liked it
About your story...
Criticism: You gotta recheck your capitalization and punctuation. I felt like the paragraphs were a little too long, so maybe if you just cut each long paragraph into two separate paragraphs to make it easier to read.
Not criticism: Sounds nice, I'm not exactly a big fan of high school stories but I will give the second chapter a chance :)