Hiiiiii there babe! I saw where you had commented on my friend's message board asking her to read your story, so I decided to check it out!
Your description is amazing by the way. I would say do good things and look like a bad person. That way, it would take a true friend to look passed your outer appearance and bother to get to know how that person truly is, despite the sterotyping. :(
I'm going to assume, since obviously the cover picture for the book is punk Harry, Harry will be the one who is assumed to be a stero typical punk then, huh? He's truly a nice guy with good intentions? I think that's sweet, if I'm honest. I'm such a sap.
Now, as for feedback wise, the story line seems lovely so far. But space out your paragraphs a bit more, yeah? Don't make them so long. It sort of bores the reader in a way. If the format of the story isn't set up in a certain way, many people won't bother to read. Maybe when another person starts dialogue, you start a new paragraph? That seems far, yeah?
That's all I've got for now babe. I'll be sure to come check back up on you soon. This story seems like it's going to be a good one. Good luck! (:
~Fawn<3
