Hi again... so I have read your first chapter and...OMG!!! I actually really loved it like ...wow. So first of all I loved how your language was so poetic and it's easy to read. Secondly, I loved how you kind of switched the point of views a bit and I could clearly see what was going on. However, there's one little improvement you could make which is to stretch the description a bit. I love how poetic it is and if you could add more and describe more, the image in my head would be ... wow.. overall, it was AWSOME, no kidding ❤️❤️
