notthenicole

https://www.wattpad.com/story/408959519?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_writing&wp_page=create&wp_uname=chandryxa
          
          Do vote for my book

Hi! I read your chapters... ❤️ your story is very interesting  in it's idea and dynamics and I'd love to read the whole book to see how you tangled up things.
          
          The only thing I noticed maybe slow down the dialogue a bit and introduce more description  of the characters. 
          It would help the reader get to know your characters better. 
          I suppose you know them weel but we don't. 
          I don't have a clear picture:
          where are they?
          what is the atmosphere like?
          what does Celest look like at that moment?
          I also want to know what does she feel when she interacts with Lewis, it seems she was struck as hell he knew who she was, and that's interesting to ldive fully into her emotions the moment he recognized her. 
          I personally love adding more emotion to the key scene. Hope you finish your story. I'll follow you for more.