novelistASH

Hey. Firstly, I’m sorry to hear you’re in a bad state, and I can assure you as a hormonal teenage girl who thought her life would end several times, things do get better. I realise that you are much older than me, and I could not realise the extent of your problems and stress and that some things cannot better, I promise you that you can get through it holding close the ones you love. And by the way, any bluntness does not bother me. I love constructive criticism, I feel it will only help me grow. I started writing fairly recently and I am not so good yet, (also considering English is not my first language,) and I know it’s going to be a long journey, but I want to have a good few pieces I can be proud of by the time I graduate from college so this really helps. 
            Thank you so much for taking out the time to give me detailed constructive responses, and I hope to come back here a few months later with improved writing :) 
            You are very knowledgable and reading this has made me realise I have a lot to learn, thank you for trying to impart such knowledge on to me. 
            I truly appreciate it from the bottom of my heart. I’ll go through your comments after my classes. 

@sonderkai Sure. I'm kind of in a bad place right now so my feedback might be a little too blunt, but I'm in a mood to help.
            
            The core three principles to writing are always going to be:
            -Keep Writing
            -Keep Reading
            -Stay inspired
            I can understand the impulse to respond to feedback and even criticism by saying that everything is biased, but if you get to the level of academic readings, thorough analysis is always so much more than subjective reaction. There is such a thing as skill in writing and as such I always try to improve. I'm glad that you have that mindset as a high schooler. It gives you the opportunity to grow as you work.
            
            However, I do understand how feedback can take these subjective forms. A lot of readers are neither critics nor analyzers. They can repeats mantras they've picked up about writing ("Show Don't Tell" and "Write What You Know" continue to be popular but there are many many others) but sometimes the advice on how to improve has absolutely no bearing on why a piece doesn't work. Experimentation and varied feedback is one of the best ways to discover your strengths as a writer.
            
            Beyond that, a reader's values can end up having a huge impact on their response to your work. While many amateur poets tend to rhyme, I've found that academia and poetry magazines look down on this practice. As such your approach should always be tailored to your audience. Knowing who your audience is can be a difficult process, but if you're one of those with a singular vision of your craft then narrowing your scope will help your work grow geometrically when compared to those who are still finding themselves.
            
            As far as writing for an audience is concerned, there is a contingent of poets (true of all artists) who believe that the emotional core comes out honest when it comes out first. That editing is unnecessary as it ruins the message. But we edit to make the art reflect what we feel.
            
            Keep all this in mind.
            
            I'll look into your work soonish.