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@novelistASH Thanks a lot for this! 
            
            I needed this so much. 
            
            I asked several people for help. They keep on saying that my writing is good and i don't really require any more improvement. 
            
            But I knew it. I knew that something was off. Whenever I reread whatever I wrote, something just didn't feel right. 
            
            I tried to talk about it several times but people kept claiming that my humour was good and my writing was justified. 
            
            I read a lot of books to figure out what I was doing wrong and still didn't understand. 
            
            Now I do. 
            I understand what is off in my books 
            
            Thanks a lot for this once again. 
            I'll try to improve slowly. 

@pweaseletmego Your style tends towards frantic clipped sentences that break the narrative to have characters interact with the narrator in a kind of zany aside. This can be fun for some one offs, but it makes it difficult to construct a serious narrative. I read through a few chapters of Bad Boy and the first chapter *Bangchanphobia* and found very little attention to tension, plotting, or having characters grow as people. Without growth there is no thrust for a story, it becomes nothing but feel good moments to tease out the next kiss scene. Good kiss scenes should also be opportunities for character writing, but I'll ignore that for now.
            
            The strongest way to stick to a story is to follow the tension. Make bad things happened. Have characters try and over come, then fail, then have them forgiven, then fail terribly and have to work themselves back up from the bottom. Every narrative doesn't need to follow this pattern, but it's a great way to get things started. Another great way to make a narrative interesting is to treat plot points like juggling. One is going up while the other is falling down. Chase the tension from main plot to side plot until everything falls and the protagonists has to fix it all OR until they catch all the balls at once.
            
            Read more books. Get a sense of the flow of a paragraph. Learn to construct a scene and describe people without losing that manic energy that keeps you excited. Remember that your voice is going to change while you work to improve but you have to keep your inspiration. Find the things you like and make them interesting to you and the reader.
            
            Edit more. Take your work seriously.
            
            For poetry, read everything out loud. Don't talk over a beat, time your words to land on the beats and melodies in your mind. Rhyming endlines is boring on its own. Creating a flow is the goal. Think of it like making lyrics. Aim for k-pop not mumblecore. Hiphop not spoken word. Speak from the heart, then edit for flow.
            
            Good luck.