hi guys!!!! I'm trying to get in poems but I'm not that good so I was hoping to get y'all's opinions and if y'all would be able too, give me some tips? here is part of my new one "Love is like a leash. And i'm on that leash.
I try and get away as I pray, and pray. But that leash says “stay”
I cry, and pry as my silky eye dies.
They say love is as sweet as sugar, but it's just salt in disguise .
Sour as a lemmon, sweet as a pie, you make me cry and cry.
You leave me out and I shout, “please don’t go! I still love you so.
I hate you, I shame you,I blame you. But its not you, is it? Its me because i'm not as exquisite" its not that good bcs its my first try and I haven't finished it and I haven't tried re-writing it yet. please give me tips on how to fix it. (ty if you read this!!! I'm going to be moving in 3-4 months and I'll be able to do more stuff without stressing, I really love y'all guys!, byeee)