oimategetit

Hey, so I have some friends,  @TheNutellaGirls and they are starting to write a book. They would really apriciate it if you checked it out.  It's called Rouge. They would also apriciate constructive feedback on it.  Thanks :D

kimbrie

@DaBlueDoggy Hey please check out my book fair enough n share some feedback on it thank u

oimategetit

@kimbrie I'm glad I could help, I'm sorry l can look over anymore I've got to catch a flight!
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kimbrie

@kimbrie I really appreciate it thank you :) I'm going to edit out all of that
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oimategetit

@kimbrie I have read the first five chapters so far and I love them, it's a really great story, there are only a few problems. Sometimes the sentence structure is slightly mixed up. There are multiple POV's (point of view) in a chapter try to stay in one POV in a chapter, most the time it's in third person, then occasionally it goes into first person. You are somtimes missing capital letters, this is a really common mistake, all writers do it. 
            For new chapters I'd advise looking over them yourself an extra time or if you don't want to, just getting a friend to look over them before you publish them or to read them out loud to yourself. It's amazing that you have written so far in your book.
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