BroadwayAstronaut

Hi! I know a lot of people find these annoying but at this point I'm desperate! I'm just starting a new story called Straight to the Heart. It's about a girl named Hope who has a dark past. When cute new guy Jessie shows up and for the first time since she left her past behind her she begins to feel something for another guy. The day she decides to once and for all leave her past behind her and open up to Jessie is the day that her past finally catches up to her. So now Hope has two choices; to shut down and hide from her past but in doing so she loses Jessie or opening up to Jessie and facing her past once and for all. I would really love it if you could read it. I only have 2 chapters up so far but I will be adding more shortly. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated! Thank you so much for reading this and I will gladly return the favor if you ever need it. Thank you so much! :D

serval

Hey, I know the­­­­­­­­­­se are super­ a­nn­oy­in­g,­ a­nd­ I­­'m­­ not gonna beg
          But I have this story called
          'An Albino On A­­­­­­­­­­ Reality Sho­w.­. ­Wh­at­ c­ould go wrong?'
          that I was hopi­­­­­­­­­­ng you could­ t­ak­e ­a ­lo­ok­ a­t ­­an­­d ­give­ my ­some feedback!
          Thanks, I know ­­­­­­­­­­these get annoying!
          (:

x_WickedLovely_x

If you say that my story is boring, then why do you read it? 
          And Finn didn't kill Miles by accident- it was on purpose, to stop Miles from telling people what Finn was planning. 
          And i'm sorry, but while i do take ideas and critisism, i don't like people to TELL me how to write my story.

graceluck

          Hii (K) 
          
          I was just wondering if you could please check out my story - In the World of Women. I've just started out and this is my first attempt so I'd be extremely grateful for any feedback at all.
          
          Thanks ;) 
          d4l 
          xxxx