ovjvfx

NVM IT NOT ALL LOST!!!

laura_reader14

Hi,
          
          I checked out Aftermath Of Before (Slimeknight) the opening is intriguing, but the hook isn’t fully clear yet.
          
          If you tighten the summary to show the stakes and tone (not just confusion), you’ll pull in more readers fast especially in fandom spaces.
          
          What kind of feeling are you aiming to give readers in chapter one?
          
          — Laura

ovjvfx

@laura_reader14 Thank you I will definitely see what I can do!! I'm hoping to make the readers a little confused however so they still understand everything that happened. (Hope that makes sense).
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