Aussie999999

If I may Suggest You should try and put a bit more Emotion into their characters Because it feels like it's slightly rushed Because then it gives the characters more meaning and impact to each other among other things Other Is then that As each day you write you slightly improve and the improve can eventually be seen so Keep up the good work You don't have Listen to me I'm but some random person but it's just a suggestion Have a good day/night mate

Aussie999999

@Aussie999999 no problem mate
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owlneo

@Aussie999999 thank you for the suggestion
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NW__48

You, yes you, you will grow big one day. Just got a feeling.

yumean

@NW__48 i agree give it time you are doing the greatest evere
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NW__48

@owlneo 
            
             I enjoy your writing, it's nice. Keep up the good work and im sure you will get the recognition you deserve
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owlneo

@NW__48 Thank you, i hope u enjoy the story as much as i did :)
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