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Hey hey hey!
THANKS FOR THE CRITIQUE! I really appreciate it. To do my deal:
So I had trouble with the first part, it seemed real out of place but I guess that's just part of the twisty plot for the reader. So no comment on that. I had just one problem though, it was the grammar and punctuation mistakes in the book. You really ought to edit the book, it was real hard to focus on the whole story when there are grammar terrors on the way. That's all. I like your cover, and I think it's a promising story.