Hey, this is Fenella.
You requested me to read your book. I have only read the first chapter so far, and these is just some constructive criticism based on that sole chapter.
The blurb, personally I think could possibly have a tiny bit more detail. Describe the characters slightly and hint at a possible complication the might occur. You do have quite a few spelling mistakes, such as putting ‘exited’ instead of ‘excited’.
In my opinion, the story kind of seems rushed and not necessarily a narrative. Especially with all the ‘i know what you’re thinking’, which is mentioned pretty often. When you’re getting the characters to text, you should do different lines, possibly with gaps. And just a note, I think you shouldn’t use emojis in texting, maybe use smiley faces and hearts using the symbols on keyboard.
For example:
Kim - What r u up to? <3
Me - Nothing much, you? :)
Sorry for the long post, hope you find this helpful to improve your writing.
-Fenella
