JoshWriteWatt
Your "story" is just the entire movie with your illogical character pushed into every scene, with inappropriate things scattered throughout. This is supposed to be for kids. It's not good.
plutoisvalid
hey! so i just want to make you aware of the fact that i made this when i was 13. i get what you’re saying and i love constructive criticism, but i don’t get why you felt the need to leave me like 5 comments saying my story is bad (it almost seems obsessive lol). sorry if the contents of the story offended you in some way, but you could’ve simply just read something else if my story was that bad to you. hope that helps!