princessdiannamarie

The strength of a story should be in the narrative, not the dialogue.

LaniChanel

Hi, I've always loved writing and I would love it if you could look into my two stories that I've written and currently writing.. They aren't edited so just tell me what you think.

princessdiannamarie

@LaniChanl okay, just read the beauty is my curse - and here's my review - add your commas in the dialogue tags. For example, "Come child, your mother is calling for you," he said, (add actions here). Some rules apply in dots and punctuation marks. 
            
            Make sure that if you use past tense, the following line will be the same. For instance: He said, as he placed the book in front of her. 
            
            Unless, He said, while his eyes were following her movements. 
            
            You don't have to use, he said, I said repeatedly though. For instance, "I think you're very pretty," His tone beckoned her to carve the sweetest smile upon her face. 
            
            I hope this helps! :-)
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