SilentSyllables
Thank you so much for taking the time to read Run, Little Mouse and for finishing the story. I really appreciate that, and I’m grateful you shared your honest thoughts as well.
I completely understand that not every story resonates the same way with every reader, and I truly value feedback like yours. If you’re open to it, I’d love to hear a little more about what didn’t quite work for you or what you felt was missing. Insights like that are incredibly helpful for me as I continue writing and improving.
Either way, thank you again for giving my story a chance and for taking the time. I genuinely appreciate readers who are willing to share their honest impressions.
prxttyinpink1
@SilentSyllables Thank you for allowing me to share my opinion on your story :) I will continue to support. You got this lol!
SilentSyllables
@prxttyinpink1 Some of the things you mentioned were actually intentional choices on my part. With Run, Little Mouse I wanted the story to feel more like a tension driven horror chase than a traditional plot-heavy story. That’s why I didn’t give the characters names or much backstory. I wanted them to feel more like archetypes (predator and prey) and keep the focus on the atmosphere, the suspense, and the feeling of being hunted. I also really love that you thought something paranormal might happen in the house. That suspense and uncertainty was something I tried to build on purpose, so hearing that the atmosphere created that expectation honestly makes me really happy. Your point about readers sometimes wanting a little more character clarity is a really good one though, especially when writing shorter pieces. It’s definitely something I’ll keep in mind as I write more stories like this. And thank you again for saying you enjoyed the atmosphere, that was one of the most important elements I wanted to capture. I’m really glad that part resonated with you.
prxttyinpink1
Aw, no problem at all! Thank you for appreciating my opinion. I try to be honest when I read books, but sometimes I don’t want to make the author feel bad about their work :(. Your book, honestly, is just a matter of personal preference for me. I am no stranger to dark romance at all but I can usually anticipate how it ends even if I don’t fully agree. I feel like your story had a few minor loopholes. I’m not sure if this was a deliberate decision. Did you want the readers to kinda anticipate how the end goes? Even if it is a short story more background on the characters would have given me more clarity on who they actually are and why they act the way they do. It doesn’t even have to be long if you don’t want it to be. Other than that I absolutely loved the atmosphere your story provided, it definitely has potential. I actually thought it’ll be a ghost coming out of the shadows, like one of the people that died in the house , especially if the house is haunted , so that was an interesting surprise to see another man out of the blue lol. I hope I articulated my feelings towards this story clearly, and if not please don’t hesitate to ask for further clarification lol :).
