Hey girl !
OK so I did read your story and here's the feedback.
Honestly, the storyline is very lovely, unique and relatable for most people. But it lacks the sparks, the spice, some tension and that's why it feels kinda gloomy. Also it was very direct, details and descriptive writing could make it more better. Otherwise the writing style was good.
I can guide you if you need help, just let me know.
Just answer these questions :
1. Do you only want it to be a short story? Or can u opt for a longer one?
2. On average how much words does each chapter consist?
3. Do you really want to end up Nandini with Manik?? Or could she end with Raghav?