I loved your book. You were so passionate about it that it brought spark and fire to my eyes. However I felt that you put a little too much emphasis it the characters thoughts. I feel as though your gathering all the thoughts in my head already and your not exactly letting me think for my self.
Remember that the reader need to imagine and think about the trail of thoughts that you have shown us. Other than that the book is PHENOMENAL. Please please update soon. Sorry I was a bit to harsh on the constructive criticism :) I got carried away.
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