rachiejay5

@mayahoran11 hey

@rachiejay5 Hi

I really want tcps to be updated tbh!

Hey  :)
          
          Would you care to read my book?
          I know that you might like it.
          
          http://www.wattpad.com/story/19730506-the-last-king
          
          Would love your feedback on it.
          I hope that you read it.
          
          Striving8
          
          PS I hope that you like it.
          
          Have an amazing day ahead.
          
          You have an artistic background picture.Great choice.

that's kinda gross but still THANK YOU!!!Xx

@harrybear_hazza12 Hi!!!!!!

Hello! :)

@louiseehoran Thank you so much for reading my book and give me an imput. It was greatly appreciated. I will go through it an try to fix the errors. I just have one question. How did you make your book do popular? I feel as if no one is reading it and I would love more options. Thanks again!

hi Rachel! ive read through your book like you asked and im here to give you feedback:)
          
          so i love the plot of the story; it is completely original and i haven't seen any other books with this idea. from its current moment in time, you could expand on it in any way you like, from having Harry be kidnapped by the attacker or have Katie out to get the members of the band, any kind of thing! the title is also original and also quite mysterious, meaning people would be drawn in by it!
          
          the grammar and punctuation is good - not perfect, but better than other stories ive seen. There are a few places where an extra speech mark has been added where its not needed or a comma is in the wrong place, which in small amounts is fine, but if it happens all the time, it's a disaster! sometimes the words are bunched up as well. it doesn't make the story any less enjoyable or easy to read, it's just that im a neat freak when it comes to stories.
          
          also, if you could, maybe try and make chapters longer? this isn't compulsory as there are some really good books out there with incredibly short chapters, but i just find it engages people more if they're longer. this is just my own personal opinion so you don't have to if you don't want to.
          
          overall, it's a promising story! if you carry on the way you are, i can see you getting good results with it. if you need any help with ideas, writing, cover design, promotion or check-overs, just message me and i'll see what I can do.
          
          good luck:)
          
          louise xx