I recently started reading "YUVRANI" and i wanted to give you a few suggestions.
The story is interesting. I am really interested in what happens after...and it's intriguing.
But I wish It was more elaborate. For example:
The names are wierd. this is an indian story, and no ancient indian woman will be named QUSHI, SHAY, MYRA, ORIYA.... (chalo yeh toh theek hai, you're the author, your wish :-))
The writing is all over the place, repeated phrases, wrong spellings and grammatical errors (although they are less in number).
I know I'm not a writer myself, and mistakes happen while typing (maximum mistakes to typo hi lag rhe hain) but I wish you used autocorrect, warna poore poore paragraphs uthake chatgpt pe hi daal do, :-P
Even if the story is interesting, these things make the overall reading experience less enjoyable. So i would suggest that the story needs major editing.
Itni achhi storyline hai, but people might skip it for the mistakes.
Baki I'm impressed. I'm so glad to see an Indian version of rebirth stories. ♥