Hii! Yes, I do remember you. Thank you for the message! It means a lot that you enjoy my writing.
I’ll definitely check out your book, but I’m not really comfortable giving critiques or pointing out mistakes in other people’s stories, since I don’t feel qualified enough to be giving writing advice. Everyone has different styles, and I don’t think I’d be the best person to judge what should or shouldn’t be changed.
I appreciate the thought though, and I wish you the best with your book!