@shikagupta170 okay...so I read through the book and I'm going to be honest with you.
- Firstly, I think you have a good idea. I see what you're trying to do with the book, the plot is nice..."A guy with a bad past and an orphan girl who has been through a lot". It's a nice plot.
- Secondly, you made a lot of grammatical errors. You spelt a lot of words incorrectly and used past tense instead of present tense in a lot of places. Although you made a lot of spelling errors, there's room for improvement.
- Thirdly, I think it's cute how you insert pictures in the story.
- Another thing is that you don't differentiate between conversations and thoughts. For instance; "She is a beautiful girl...you look beautiful". The first part of my sentence is my character's thought but the second part of the sentence is what the character said out loud. Usually, you're supposed to differentiate so that the readers can know what the character said and what the character thought.
- I think you have a good story idea, you just need proper guidance on how to write it.
