Robert mark Williams

Would you be kind enough to read a friend's first English book and say what you think?  https://www.wattpad.com/story/288091677?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_writing&wp_page=create&wp_uname=__anninaaw&wp_originator=ZmB37ZIEV5cjrwwBukzDhfZfYHzeQmb2TBXjGFkZjV9KG8GbQVYNe6vqAPkOXnnvYaAavcrN%2FIsoVRo5V1UYygTPxElWeCjb13XB9%2B%2FCgT25YcGDOkvAVXphnl6gpciK