rollinlemon

okay soooo this story has interesting storyline, a minor thing that's quite bothering me is how the blind main character could tell she's pulling a black leggings or her sister looked out to the window. I think the author should lose that word as shes blind. But I'll keep reading it as it pick my interest though ❤️
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rollinlemon

Allright it's really disturbing to know how brea suddenly informed  all the crucial informations on black wings to an allegedly intruder in A MAFIA MANSION  I know the reader should know this kind of information but to just blatantly telling this stuff is such a shame  but the idea of this book is soooooo soooo good I don't want to stop reading 
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rollinlemon

@rollinlemon I love the way author writes how kellan could tell what was goin on by the scents and sounds of everything ❤️❤️❤️
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rollinlemon

but I'll try ignore it and keep reading
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rollinlemon

@rollinlemon why everything happens just for the sake of information deliver to the reader blatantly, it doesn't make any sense. For such a big powerful mafia they organize everything sloppily with poor operation.
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rollinlemon

I remember reading the story but I don't why I stopped reading this while it's quite intriguing at the early chapters, though too many coincidence, I keep going since they live in the same area meeting up by accident probably happen. Till I got the chapter how H step in to take Xavier place to close an important deal, though shes quite capable and understanding business, it's quite too far stretched for it too happen in real life, that too because X was asleep as the effect of the medicine. I feel the scene need to happen just to show reader how capable H is in business and show up like a hero, that's where I stopped reading the book. 
          
          And for the plastic Barbies to just show up at home too many times even after X instructed the security to not let her pass is really bothering. Important businessman such as X should have tight securities, no questions. People can't just barge in as they please. Except they got some help from inside like workers or something. 
          
          It starts really great and promising with rich people has their own private beach and Leo stopped her so Leo could meet H, and Luca has his own security following him everywhere, the trauma and everything but the coincidence and forced scene was just too much, its not fitting naturally in the story. I see the potential in the book though so as usual I'd post here and if it's bein rewritten I'd love to reread for the third time ❤️❤️
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rollinlemon

Hi so I think this book has really really really really great story line and so much mystery to discover but honestly the hunter character showed up everywhere, I keep going thinking maybe he stalks her so its possible he was everywhere. Half of the story, I stopped reading because I think the characters switched their emotions too quickly without enough reasoning. Hunter would go mad at some point, scarlett hurts and the next thing I know scarlet didnt mind hunter and act like he is tolerable, and this coming from someone who disappointed, left years ago, broken home and all alone. So, I put this story here, in case there are some improvements in the future and I want to read it again ❤️
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rollinlemon

Honestly the storyline was good and keep me reading till the second break in into the kings home. I mean, for a mafia king his security sucks as hell and people come in and out just like that doesn't support how the supposed to be powerful mafia character plays out. I stopped reading but I knew this book has potential so like usual Im just gonna post my thoughts on this book here 
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/152980373