Hello! I hope all is well with you! :)
Well, I've been reading some of your stories and they're really good, there's just one little problem, in some you don't separate the lines. I believe it makes it easier for the reader if it is "separated", you know? Something like:
-I like strawberry- She said.
-I like strawberries too!- He said.
Different from how it is in some books, like Genshin. Where the lines are left without divisions, which can confuse the reader (my experience)
Typically you put something like:
Then she said I like strawberries and he replied I like them too
I don't know, I think this could help you a little, because your stories are really interesting! It would be a good improvement for the reader, but it's up to you to decide.
I really enjoyed your story, so please keep writing! I hope you have a great day!