@royal_love_xox
Hi! First of all, lemme just say that so far I LOVE Glow. Seriously, the pace and style of your writing is amazing, and I love the idea as well, you're definitely a great writer with awesome skills! As for some advice...hmmm...you could separate the paragraphs out a little more, as opposed to having really long paragraphs, which would make it a bit easier to read. But otherwise it's great. Oh, and thanks! I hope you like it and my other short stories!