Heyy, I hope you don’t mind me saying this—I’m sharing this as a reader who really wants your story to do well
Your storyline has a lot of potential, but it feels a bit too fast-paced. Slowing it down and adding more depth will help readers connect better. Also, there are quite a few mistakes in the starting chapters—just some proofreading will improve readability a lot.
The announcement parts in between chapters break the flow a little, so maybe remove them after some time. And try limiting pictures—1–2 per chapter looks much cleaner.
In recent chapters, the dialogues are fully in Hindi. Since Wattpad has a wider audience, mixing Hindi with English translations would work better.
Also, your cover doesn’t match how good your story actually is Updating the cover, title, and description could really help attract more readers.
And since you’re in 12th, don’t stress too much. You can use AI to refine your writing and read more books for inspiration. You could also check out books like Sold to Thakurs, Akshara: The Forgotten Seed, and writers like @rusxverse—her work is really well-paced and engaging, and she interacts nicely with readers too. Might give you some helpful ideas or guidance.
I’m saying all this because your story genuinely deserves more recognition ✨
