I would like to give you an advice I was given not long ago by a fellow Wattpader that helped me Loads.
Shorten your paragraphs, divide them into smaller once, you can skip a line when someone finishes saying something.
It's easier for the readier and Better for the eye. Long chapter get you confused and eventually bored.
Good content but very long paragraphs.
I believe the whole chapter was only one paragraph, try dividing as I said and notice the difference it'll make.
Anyways, I hope I was of any help to you and I'm waiting for your update to continue reading.
A bientôt j'espère
