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1) once Draco and Harry get together can you make like a scene when idk they cuddle and Draco tells him about his dad and they’re really close? Also maybe Draco or Harry can be a lil possessive yk? To give some spice to us readers!! 
          2) since it’s kinda following the story line maybe hermione can be bisexual so at the end please get her together w Ron!! And pansy can still be friends w her 
          3) last I promise!! I think you should add way more drama!! I really enjoyed the story but idk I would be cooler w some drama also maybe add the cast at the start bc I find them really pleasant to see ngl and the characters aesthetic!! 
          I think I’m done sorry if I’m writing this much of a feedback but I really see the potential of the story and I want it to turn out good! Ur doing great love u just need to fix some stuff, continue this story please!!!

Girl I have some feedback about your story I like the dynamics for now and I noticed some spelling mistakes but I get it girl English isn’t my first language either. I like how Draco became more soft w time but I think it all happened too soon ngl also I read usually a lot of fanfics and sometimes characters like Draco or Harry are a lil out of character but with them you did a good job!! The one I kinda don’t feel is hermione I get that Draco is gay and it actually really fits him but i don’t really get why hermione got w pansy because it lowkey seems like you tried to pair them up kinda and also poor Ron i mean at some point you can do that Draco apologies? Idk but i really think Ron should get into the group and also the party scene was good but idk why hermione sneaked it some alcohol that’s why I told you she seemed a lil out of character but at some point I get it. I wanted also to say that I’m in chapter 5 ig? So I still have to read a little more. Anyway also in some chapters I kinda felt like nothing happened and that it was all like “I went in the hallway I talked with Luna and I went back to my room” all over idk if u get it. Now that I’m done hehe I have some suggestions!! 
          
          I’ll do a part 2