SandyyBeach

Your storyline is good.Although there are many language mistakes,I enjoy reading it-never give up!Looking forwards to next chapters,Fighting!!

SandyyBeach

Aiyaa,I am not criticizing you,it's a really good story and they are not major mistakes so I am sorry if I make u sad
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saaywyd

@SandyyBeach Thank you for the feedback and I'll fix it later
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chenlpeenerweener

BUB

chenlpeenerweener

Do u liek my platypussi
            
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