sabrinasloann

I just wrote my first chapter of my first book and it would be great if u all could give it a look and tell me how u feel it is. I’ll read one in return just give me a follow

Weber32

@sabrinasloann I see. I already wrote on your message board. 
          	  
          	  Anyway, I enjoyed your first chapter. I can picture the characters well. You give some good descriptions. 
          	  
          	  Just wanted to say, every time a new character talks, you have to start a new paragraph. 
          	  "No", Bobby said.
          	  
          	  "Yes," Jenn argued.
          	  
          	  With the space between the tags.
          	  
          	  Also, of you highlight the words and hit the lines that are to the left, you'll move your paragraphs to the right side, instead of having them centered.
          	  
          	  Can't wait to read more,  
          	  I will be following the story. 
          	  
          	  PS. You can disregard everything I said if you want. I'm not trying to be mean at all. Just trying to help. I wish I had someone to tell me when I was trying to figure all that out. It was hard.
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sabrinasloann

I just wrote my first chapter of my first book and it would be great if u all could give it a look and tell me how u feel it is. I’ll read one in return just give me a follow

Weber32

@sabrinasloann I see. I already wrote on your message board. 
            
            Anyway, I enjoyed your first chapter. I can picture the characters well. You give some good descriptions. 
            
            Just wanted to say, every time a new character talks, you have to start a new paragraph. 
            "No", Bobby said.
            
            "Yes," Jenn argued.
            
            With the space between the tags.
            
            Also, of you highlight the words and hit the lines that are to the left, you'll move your paragraphs to the right side, instead of having them centered.
            
            Can't wait to read more,  
            I will be following the story. 
            
            PS. You can disregard everything I said if you want. I'm not trying to be mean at all. Just trying to help. I wish I had someone to tell me when I was trying to figure all that out. It was hard.
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Weber32

Thanks for following. If you can spare time, I'd love for you to look at my Paranormal Romance Draven Hawke.
          
          If you have a book, I'd be happy to look at it.

sabrinasloann

I actually just started one
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sabrinasloann

I’d love that
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