This is psyezrahmm hahaha
I made this account just to share one last point, and I’ll really try to be as respectful as this space seems to require.
Plot-wise: I have to commend the dedication to the cheating trope—it’s doing an incredible amount of heavy lifting. Halos buong narrative naka-anchor na doon. It come off as reinforcing certain STEREOTYPES sa LGBTQ+ community but I guess that’s part of the “depth” people here appreciate.
Writing: The uneven chapter lengths also add a certain charm. ramdam mo kung saan mas may energy magsulat, halata mo rin saan tinamad
Humor: I can see the effort. I really can. Kennedy’s conyo and Isla’s very refined way of speaking create a distinct tone—but at times, it feels less like natural dialogue and more like something you’re supposed to find witty. Which, to be fair, many of you clearly do. Wala namang taong ganun ka conyo magsalita
Characters: What I find most interesting is how much the story leans on Isla’s abusive background to justify her actions. Ang consensus dito is that it’s “realistic,” which again says a lot. I think not everything needs to be framed as trauma to feel meaningful. Minsan people are just making bad choices. Pero I understand that might not feel “deep” enough.
of course, full respect to everyone here who clearly enjoys unpacking every detail and assigning layers of meaning to it. Feeling deep isn’t inherently a problem minsan lang, it starts to feel like the depth is being SUPPLIED by the reader rather than the text.
Hopefully, this answers your question on where the author could improve. At sayo author, no need to block me again, I’ll be deleting this account after this anyway.
