regalrio

Hey Jemima..
          Now I know how much you hate advertisements but I see you're a critique and I would love to know your opinion on my work. My story is called Chosen Souls and I've only written the prologue so far. If you do check it out, plz be as blunt as you want..I appreciate honesty.
          Thanks..
          PS: I <3 skins too!

Aetila

Hey there! 
          If you've got some free, bored time, I was wondering if y o u could read one of my sto ri es and comment on it! (voti ng , f anning, and whatever ar e a ll o ptional, its the revi ews I nee d!) I'd love to retu rn the fav or, and I will! 
          I know this mig ht annoy you, but anything i s greatly appreciated! Thanks f o r reading this! 
          -Celeste 
          My Stories--Gol den Dawn; Karis Gebelin was j u st your typical Hawaii tra ns pl ant to Manhattan, obsess ive to p student who actually pro cras tinates everything, and b ound of Ivy; future care erist and c urrent fortune tel ler. U ntil-- that is--she fin ds out everyth ing she aced is more o r less a ben trevato-- so good bye model student and strivin g socialit e--and hell o demons layer/alche mist and automatic industry ty coon--t hat is, if she survives. 
          
          Elven Mob Bosse s and Rebel Heirs--Welcome t o a world where elves,well, a re n 't your fairy tale elves. Ru le d in a ochlocracy, of O liga rch s and tech savvy mega­corpo rati ons, of underworld crimin al ru le, resistance in this m obocra cy is futile wh en your King ca n be your dish washer i n one da y. Intergala ctic best seller an d future O ligarch, K ronos fød t av Mø rke’skala soon finds out ho w his fickl e world migh t cha nge--with his help too. 
          
          P.S. I know you get a lot of these, but I'll say it; I really don't think my main characters are Mary Sues & Gary Stus, they aren't gorgeous, extremely talented, maybe have one talent, but that's it. My stories also are not centered around one cliche relationship between two gorgeous people or whatever, and I really hope you can try comment! 
          Thank you for the time!

Slader

I turn 13 on July 29, Sorry I've taken so long to reply, I hardly go on wattpad either.  Yes Hawaii was everything you could imagine it to be, The sunsets were incredible. I'm back in Alaska now,(Home again!!!!) Anyway right now I'm rewriting the beginning of my first book,  It's sooo stupid it's not even funny,
          L8r  Slader

Majorbea

Hey thanks so much for checking out my story! I didn't mean to make her like Rogue but I had just watched that movie and I did it  subconsciencly. Also my brother told me to be more descriptive too! Thanks so much, I really appreciate it!!!

Majorbea

Hey, may I please ask you guys a BIG favor? I'm writing a story called 'Mel aka 5-2-9'. Can you please read it? Its about this girl that lived her whole life in a room and has never seen anything out of those four walls until the lady that has taken care of her helps her escape. She can't touch anyone or she'll kill them, she goes and tries to find a man that had sent her a letter stating he knew everything about her. Along the way she goes through learning things for the first time to getting stuck in a orphanage. Please tell me what you think.
          Thanks, AnnaBea AKA MajorBea

Slader

hey! look who's back! We're in hawaii right now, Didn't I already tell You how old I was? Anyway I'm 12. I need to check your message if you asked any more questions, if so I will post another message here
           Good to hear back from you!

wendyandpeterpan

Thank you so much! (:
          It honestly means a lot. However, i'm actually quite surprised you like Medony by the first chapter? It gets a lot more better :)
          would you mind critiquing some of my other stories?  
          <3 i understand if not, but it would mean a lot (: