Hallo semifrequentflyer,
Your story 'Love, Life... ' is full of possibilities.
Hope your 'share' in the non-fiction club means you are continuing with it.
I think, at some point, you will need to start it further into the story (perhaps at that most dramatic moment of her life/death on the line?), add more dialogue, and then fill in some backstory before continuing on.
I'm no expert in plot-weaving, so would suggest you get other opinions - and 'take or leave' what I say.
Whatever you choose - please keep writing. This has so much potential.
