Shahd

@MeasleToe thank you I will try my best to make it better thank alot  

@shahdlouis

I read the first chapter and what I can say is that you need to work on your grammar skills more :) some sentences dont add up and it creates confusion with the readers. Let them in your mind and be more descriptive with the surroundings. Also, you should maybe slow it down a bit? everything happened too quickly and it made me confused. Be aware that the readers dont know whats happening yet so you should be more descriptive so they can catch up on what has happened
            
             :) thats all I have to say.