Shah Mallo

Shah I never knew you were a great writer until  now, I' am amazed.

@lavanM 
          Hopefully! Thank you so much Lavan! :)

@NiwarNostalgia 
          Thank you dear so much! :) 
          Loved your advices! 

The sequence of events is nice, you seem to be careful of what to show next. The stories are short, but they have a beautiful message. You can convey what you want successfully. 
          The point that I want you to consider are as the following:
          1. Pay attention to the use of tense in your verbs. In some cases you shift. For fiction, past tense is used.
          2. Use quotation marks "..." For the speeches of characters to distinguish it from narration.
          3. Be careful of use of different words and descriptions, let them not repeat to make the story more interesting.
          Otherwise, you are great and I love your stories :)

Dear Shah...
          I read "The Guy That Got Bullied", "A True Love Kiss"... When I have time will read others. I can see that you have a spring of narration inside you flowing. The sequence of events is nice, 

"The Guy that got bullied" I realy liked that story it is so emotional like when i read it i was going to cry specialy when he teies to kill himself . I hate those guys who try to bully others and specialy their own life which now cares for it . God i wish u could help every single person that is being bullied and can do something for their life . Very well done Shah i like it a lot .

"A true love kiss " I realy like that stroy and it was interesting. It was like any king and queen story which their parents dont want their son to live how he wants and who to Love but at the end he do and live forever happy. I realy realy realy like the conclusion because there was a word which says "the one and only " it is Adele song but why I love it something else which my Best friend is used to call me and makes me realy happy.