Hi there! I'm done reading the prologue of your story, I apologize if I don't really have the time to read each chapter. However, one of the things I observed in your story is that you have a good idea or the story, though it was not written quite well on the prologue. There are sentences wherein the idea is somewhat confusing since you are compressing the thoughts in just one sentence. One tip, don't forget to use punctuation marks to organize your thoughts.
I really don't know how you will take this comment from me, but please remember that this is a constructive criticism to help you in writing stories. Lastly, I am not perfect so if you think that I have mistakes in the observations I made, feel free to tell me so that we can both learn from this.
I would also like to express my gratitude since you asked me to read your story, for that I feel priviledged. Thank you! :)