Prettypinkpretty
First of all, I’d recommend using relevant tags like #ATEEZ, #K-pop, and the names of the members featured in your story. It really helps readers find your work more easily, and it gives your story a better chance of reaching the right audience! Also, before I share my thoughts or suggestions, I’d encourage you to read through your own chapter once more. If you feel satisfied with how it flows and delivers your intended emotions or message — that’s already a win! And honestly, I’m still kind of new to reviewing stories myself, so I might not be the best at giving deep critiques but I’ll always try my best to support and encourage where I can. Keep going and don’t be afraid to grow — we’re all learning together
shiberplushi
@Prettypinkpretty oh i see again thanks for your suggestion, i will focus more on clearity and how sweet of you,
Prettypinkpretty
@shiberplushi Of course, it’s not bad at all, and you definitely didn’t miss anything! As you mentioned earlier, the storyline can feel a bit confusing at times — and I agree with that. There were a few scenes where I had to re-read parts just to fully understand what was happening. But that doesn’t mean it’s bad, not at all! The idea is there, and it’s strong — it just needs a little refining for smoother flow and clarity. You're doing great, and with a bit of polishing, the story will truly shine even brighter!