jmygGiyun

@shiberplushi, I have a dark request if you ever feel like writing it. 
          ( YOU HAVE TO WRITE )
          
          Yunho is a quiet village boy who has never been exposed to the modern world. He doesn't know how to use electronics, expensive skincare, or even simple things like turning on the shower in Mingi's bathroom.
          
          On the day of the wedding, the groom runs away, so Yunho is forced to marry the groom's younger brother, Mingi, just to save both families' reputation.
          
          Mingi absolutely hates the marriage. He thinks Yunho is ugly, old-fashioned, and embarrassingly clueless. He keeps losing his temper, buys products for Yunho out of frustration, and expects him to change overnight, but Yunho doesn't even know where to begin.
          
          I want it to be full of angst, emotional pain, misunderstandings, slow character development, and a really dark atmosphere. 
          
          PLEASE AND MAKE SURE OUR MINGI 
          HEHE 
          HE IS HARSH RUDE TYPE HEHEHEHE

shiberplushi

@jmygGiyun it is challenging but not impossible,  Request accepted
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just91

Hello there. I’m new to the English community in here so I’d really appreciate your support and feedback. Mind checking out my new book? The couple is woosan and I bet it’s going to surprise you! 
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/1618652534?utm_source=ios&utm_medium=link&utm_content=share_reading&wp_page=reading&wp_uname=just91

just91

Tysm. It means a lot
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shiberplushi

@just91 yup, I will give feedback after some days as I am stuck in exams right now.
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Prettypinkpretty

First of all, I’d recommend using relevant tags like #ATEEZ, #K-pop, and the names of the members featured in your story.
          It really helps readers find your work more easily, and it gives your story a better chance of reaching the right audience! 
          
          Also, before I share my thoughts or suggestions, I’d encourage you to read through your own chapter once more. If you feel satisfied with how it flows and delivers your intended emotions or message — that’s already a win! 
          
          And honestly, I’m still kind of new to reviewing stories myself, so I might not be the best at giving deep critiques  but I’ll always try my best to support and encourage where I can. Keep going and don’t be afraid to grow — we’re all learning together

Prettypinkpretty

no it's okay <333
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shiberplushi

@Prettypinkpretty oh i see again thanks for your suggestion, i will focus more on clearity and how sweet of you,
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Prettypinkpretty

@shiberplushi Of course, it’s not bad at all, and you definitely didn’t miss anything!
            As you mentioned earlier, the storyline can feel a bit confusing at times — and I agree with that. There were a few scenes where I had to re-read parts just to fully understand what was happening. But that doesn’t mean it’s bad, not at all!
            The idea is there, and it’s strong — it just needs a little refining for smoother flow and clarity. You're doing great, and with a bit of polishing, the story will truly shine even brighter!
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