shivuna

Chapter 28 is out.
          	
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ProsperionX

An honest feedback you ask, the overall story is quite engaging no doubt, the characters consistently follow their arc and for now nothing felt without logical. The mystery of past felt earned and the motivation of character is clear, so yeah the content is readable.
          There's two things I felt you should dealt with, first you talk about the king of Rajsthan, but in current times there's no king who is ruling the whole rajsthan even in the past the kingdom are within the rajsthan haryana area— provinces like royal family of udaipur, jaipur, jaisalmer, Jodhpur, bikaner, chittorgarh etc having popular kingdoms like mewar, Rajputanas— then after independence Sardar vallabhbhai patel came and integrate these provinces into one state which is Rajsthan now ruled by chief minister. It felt like a technical issue...
          What can you do? Specify the province area and the royal family, so that the information you're working on do not feel ambiguous, instead feel real or near real.
          
          Secondly, you can use only first name of character in chapters like instead of using Asthi Rai Singhania you can use Asthi only, sometimes reading the whole name felt overwhelming to read and break the immersion while reading.
          
          That's what I felt, I hope it will help you. Also, if possible I can like to get a feedback on Recurring Hyms as well, I would love to like your views...

shivuna

@ProsperionX  sure.  Royal king! Its fix doesn't match to real world. I just blend Fiction and Realism balance.
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