sickmlgirls

So im unable to sign in to this account on my new laptop so I'm moving all my books to my other account @Ghost_phantom_cos.

sickmlgirls

Hey snowflakes I really like if you guys could help me by telling what you think of my description of Lake of avalon. Here it is , The Lake Of Avalon is a vast calm lake with a mountainous island in the middle of it. It has a lonely mysterious structure that sits on top of the smallest closest mountain. There is a smoggy fog surrounding the tower that leaks over the calm waters of the lake. The island would seem dark but peaceful at the same time. The water seem tranquil and mystical. 
          
          I enjoy the Lake Of Avalon because it’s where Merlin let Arther rest by giving him a Viking burial and is also where Arthur is to return from when Albion requires him most. It is also where Lancelot, Elyan and Freya was put to rest in the same way as Arthur. Merlin also fling Excalibur a sword made by dragon breath and only sword that could kill Merlin in to the Lake Of Avalon where the Lady Of The Lake also know as Freya catches it and take it down to the bottom of the lake.
          
          Please comment below nico phantom out

mooonwaffle

@sickmlgirls 
            Sweet! :)
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sickmlgirls

@mooonwaffle Thanks I make sure to go and correct those and I have some merlin books that I'm working on for the future that you might like
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mooonwaffle

@sickmlgirls 
            
            Very good and detailed! I especially liked the line, "... smoggy fog surrounding the tower that leaks over the calm waters ." Very nice description. You're painting a picture in my mind!
            
            A couple things. The 'was' should be 'were' in this line. "It is also where Lancelot, Elyan and Freya were* put to rest..." The sentence is referring to multiple people. Also, 'fling' should be 'flung,' since its past tense (though I'm sure that was just a typo.)
            
            Finally, you're missing a comma after Excalibur.
            The sentence that follows is a bit long, so I might add a period and start a new one so it's easier to read. If you were to keep the sentence as the original, you would need a comma before and after "also known as Freya."
            
            There are also a few more typos that I'm sure you just looked past (I do that all the time. It's like my fingers think faster than my brain haha)
            Overall, I really like it! You are an excellent writer :) I hope to read some of your books!
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sickmlgirls

Hay snowflakes I know I been gone for a while for a few reasons 1) I been trying get my sleep back to normal 2) I been extremely busy with college and SU meetings 3) the keyboard I use is my brothers and it hard to get thing off him when I need them (even if he don't use it ) so I decide I'm giving up on getting the keyboard from my brother instead I'm going wait till Christmas or my birthday (which is January ) which is when my mum is getting me a laptop us ever Christmas or birthday so you guy will have to wait (balm my brother) I will try to use the keypad on my surface but I find it very had to type and the speed I type without it gliching. Also I had a lot of idea for book but I don't know if you guys would prefer me to finish the one I have now or bring new out and finish the one now at same time. 
          That all for not till next time nico phantom out

sickmlgirls

@mooonwaffle Thank you
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mooonwaffle

@sickmlgirls Happy early birthday!
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sickmlgirls

Hay guys long time no see  so I'm going be gone for a while off Wattpad and other social media because someone is saying I'm tracing so I'm going focus on proving my innocent I will however carry the drawing till Halloween thing I've been doing on my Instagram  stay safe snowflakes