sidehoe63PO

your stuff is real good. i think my only criticisms would be style over substance. using synonyms and flowery language seems to be something you do a lot in your poetry and it’s kinda noticeable and not necessarily ‘lazy’ but feels somewhat stilted and empty. another small thing is sometimes you cut off lines in the middle of a sentence and it’s very abrupt and can ruin poetic flow 
            example (from asteria): 
            oh those small lights within the 
            fathomless magnitude of darkness
            
            otherwise it’s cool