@stpekay000 @stpekay000 I gave it a read, and I think that you should keep writing. I think that you have great ideas (Of course I am biased I do love Barry whump), but also, as you continue to write, you are just going to get better at it.
You might not get a ton of reads and viewers for a while. Part of it is that it's a new book and it takes time for people to find it. I have that happening right now with the Psych one-shot book I'm working on. The more you post on it, the more likely people are to find it. But again, it will take time.
But don't get discouraged! If you enjoy writing, then keep doing it. Write what you want to read. Don't mind if there aren't a ton of views or votes, just have fun with it and you'll get better and more comfortable with your writing style.
Let me know if you ever need anything from me. :)