Hi. I am completed with your critique and I must say your a good writer. Your words flow very well. There were only a few grammar errors but there was very few. I voted and fanned:)
Hi! So...you love Percy Jackson series and drawing stuff like anime? Me too! :) That means we'll probably get along. Oh and good luck on your stories.
~Greetings from Camp Half-Blood's Cabin 2 Co-Counselor