Damilola Oladunni

@sky-chic Take your time! I would honestly resist the urge to rewrite, and try to keep your forward momentum in the story. Though...I can't speak much there, since I've re-written the 1st chapter/proluge of TotG probably 10-15 times since getting the idea, and this is the third story restart of the rough draft. =S Also the farthest I've gotten into a draft of TotG. 
            But I would do what you feel is best, so if rewriting is it - go for it! And let me know if you ever want an outsider's perspective. I really do enjoy talking writing. And when you get around to it, leave comments on TotG when you would like while reading. I know in this draft my main concern is characters/plot stuff, so different things that may bother you or come across as out of place/out of character, let me know! It's very helpful for me, especially when I finish and begin to do the major revision process. I already am well aware of how bad the pacing is. =D I just find it easier to cut the excess than fill in the gaps later. I used to write really spare back when I started, and just hated having to find ways to insert more information/details about scene and characters, so figured it was best to put too much and hack to shreds later on.

@sky-chic  And yes, you'll be able to. That's the thing I love about writing; you can do whatever you want, especially in fantasy. There are no limits. But it takes practice and time for you to develop a familiarity with using words/punctuation and the like to garner an effect on a reader. If it touches YOU, then you're halfway there! But it takes lots of bad words/paragraphs to be able to find and write the amazing ones. 
            It can be a bit of a love/hate relationship, but love of writing always wins out, even if you end up sulking at it for a while. (Which I will do)

@sky-chic No worries! And again, I cannot stress enough that you have to have fun and not focus too much on mistakes. You just have to acknowledge them and move on. 
            The very first thing I wrote was a hugeeee learning curve for me, as it was basically a giant experiment! I had a blast at the time, and even though people pointed out I was mucking up a lot (trust me, it was quite interesting - I still have all my old stories on one of the computers and will go through them on occasion for nostalgia's sake) I just had a blast doing it! 
            For what you seem to be going for, and probably because I'm re-reading it, might I suggest giving "The Hero and the Crown" by Robin McKinley a read? It may help give you some ideas, and I know she uses an interesting voice throughout it/really plays with how she arranges her words in sentences to manipulate how it "reads". I know the worst part of editing for me is how much word swapping I have to do in different sentences.
            Like what you've already been doing, reading a lot really, really helps. The more I've read, the better I've been able to spot my own mistakes. But I know how elusive it can get! Plus, when you've just written a draft, it takes time to be able to get enough distance to "read" it without correcting unwittingly in your mind as you do. 
            
            
            Ohh! Science! =D I like the sciences, but my math skills dragged down the possibility of going terribly far in them, haha. I've always been an english nerd, though I've never taken it farther after school. Thought about it, but so much of it is focused toward Literature, and I'm a big lover of genre novels. Go figure!