the story was great! I love it! but you'll need some corrections like for example, you use did or didn't don't use the past tense of the main verb, you must use present tense. Also, I love it because it's mostly narrative, well, i like stories written in narrative, not always in dialougue. Anyways! you should continue to write this kind of stories and tbh it's hella long! haha it took me time to read it but i didn't regret it, it was actually worth it! so keep up the good work! one last thing, thanks for reading one of my books, I really appreciate it! uwu