great job!!! N o worries about grammar lol I think your style will let that slide and for any grammar nazis pffftttt haha Hope to see many more oneshot or longer stoke that fire of your desire :P
Hey please continue writing my every fear and desire. I saw that you said that you might not finish it but please do! I can tell that this story has the potential to be a great story. I have faith in you and your book! Pleaseee dont give upp!