Laine Abson

@smilesillies thank you so much! these points will really help a lot. 
            I've been trying to show and tell and doing some research.
            guess I'll start explaining more because I didn't think I needed to, but as you pointed out, I should
            thanks a lot!

- over explain things. Sometimes, we readers are just dumb. As the writer, you deeply analyze the original story, you research, and you keeping your information fresh through fact checking against the book. Readers do hardly any of these things. It’s been YEARS since I’ve read the books. I remember most of the characters, but sometimes I forget some of the dynamics at camp. Explain them. Explain why Hermès cabin is so crowded. Clarify if others know who her godly parent is (it wasn’t clear whether anyone actually knew). Assume the reader is dumb and read the stories once several years ago. It just helps. 
            
            - clarify time jumps. Sometimes I was thrown for a loop when it said ‘later on,’ or something like that because it felt abrupt. Use a symbol like ~*~. I use ***** to represent a time jump or change in POV. It helps the readers because, again, your job id to treat us like we’re dumb. 
            
            Overall, great story and o fully intend to keep reading. 

Hey! I read the first few chapters and I really like it! You seem to have a good plot going and some interesting characters. Overall, you’re doing great, but here’s some pointers from the little things I read:
            - show more, say less. If your main character feels uneasy, don’t say it, describe it. Her stomach roils, a frown pulls at her lips, she feels a tug in the back of her mind—all these things can tell the reader the same thing while also making it feel more real. 
            
            - include more internal thought. Sometimes OCs fall a little flat because things happen with them instead of to them. If she tries to stop Clarise from bullying other campers, explain why (like how she feels and why she feels that way). And if Annabeth says something rude, say why the character reacts as she does. Why does she sympathize with Percy? How does she feel about the gods? What are her feelings about what happened to Ethan? Who exactly is she frustrated with when Percy knows nothing and why? Answering these things give the readers more insight into the personality and moral character of your OC, allowing them to invest in her better and thus want to keep reading. 

@smilesillies OHMYGOD IM ON MY WAY TO READ IT RN SHSYJSHS TY SO MUCH FOR UPDATING 

@lazy_ass31 Hey! you asked this question almost two years ago! Whoops! But to answer the question you definitely forgot about, yes! I'm still writing The Lives We Lead and I have not abandoned it. I am a senior in college this year and I'm very busy, so I don't see a lot getting updated anytime soon. But!! I'm taking a gap year after this and I definitely want to finish this story. Will it take another two years to get to the end? Probably. But We'll get there and if you follow my profile, you will get notified every time I update, because I announce it. Hope this helps!

Yay!!!!!!!!!!!!!¡!!!!!!!!!!

@-stilinski_24 It does not, I'm sorry :). Despite that, it has a very compelling plot and it includes Isaac Lahey! But no Newtmas or Sterek. I actully am kind of taking the Thomas and Teresa route, but it's a long time coming (slooooooow burn) and I've done a lot of work on her character to show changes as the Teresa we see at the end really wasn't fit for any relationships. I hope you give my story a shot!!