Cormaclaggen
I know that you're in need of some help in your story. And if you want to improve just give it a try in my critique shop.
Here's the link: https://my.w.tt/sgYgeNu7UR
The following are the parts that I will critique in your story.
Outer Parts:
☑ Title
☑ Book Cover
☑ Blurb
Inner Parts:
☑ Plot:
☑ Exposition
☑ Conflict
☑ Conclusion
☑ Phasing
☑ Narration:
☑ Spelling and Grammar
☑ Show vs. Tell
☑ Choice of words
☑ Style
☑ POV
☑ Characters:
☑ Character Development
☑ Dialogue
☑ Strengths and Weaknesses