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Hi I'm wondering if you could read and critize my story, The Gangster's Twin Sister. Hehe nagbabakasakali lang
          
          Here's the Prologue:
          
          Paano nga ba masasabing tapos na ang laban? 
          
          Paano kung ang inaakalang tapos ay nagsisimula pa lang?
          
          Ang masaklap na nakaraan pala ay makakaapekto sa kasalukuyan.
          
          All of the weapons are pointed to the Maximiliens's one and only princess, Light Maximilien.
          
          But why is it her? Why is it on the gangster's twin sister.
          
          Kung nagustuhan niyo po feel free to read it pero kung hindi naman, ok lang po. Thanks!