ss_zelda

I will start writing when I have the time to, I am a college student with a busy schedule, things will be updated in time. 

If I may ask, why are you telling me this?

That's cool

Alright, I read through a few pages and I can tell you, it looks and sounds amazing! Keep writing!! 

Alright, I looked through your story and it's a good idea! But the thing about it is, it isn't a story, it's a script. If you want to make it as a book you should probably write through Toon Link's eyes, example: As I walked on the battle field I could see a figure, "Who's there?" I had to squint to really make out the mysterious shadow. They look like a man... / then go on to explain what the character might look like/ "So... You must be the new opponent?" The man had a low stern voice, I nod. /then continue as such, but remember when someone speaks you should double space it, you can go through one of my pages in one of books for an example, introducing characters one by one is also a good idea, tension is a key component, you should also always make sure you leave your audience asking question so as they read they say "What will happen now!? Will Toon Link win?" Things like that, you know?